Serendipity

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4671236-serendipity

This is an awesome fantasy story filled with romance, mystery, tragedy, angst and more. It is something I really enjoyed reading and I recommend it to all. I know the whole story of mutants saving the world has been done, but this seems so original and done in a whole new fresh way. I can’t wait until the plot picks up the pace.

The grammar and spelling needs slight work, along with the chapters being slightly longer and the author needs to be a bit more descriptive. Overall these problems are very minor. Again, I find the story very original and I like that.

You could say it’s a little too melodramatic, but I’d be a hypocrite if I said that since I tend to write stories like this. Seriously, I think it’s taken a little bit overdone with the drama feels good, the emotions, but the entire not speaking and dressing in black, keeping her face unseen… Is way out there. Whole new level of angst and drama, but maybe that’s what gives this story that spooky character.

I recommend this story, the summary was done really well it can pull readers in and the rest of the story keeps them reading. The chapters are short but at least something happens to continue the plot and it’s not unneeded fillers. Overall it’s a story worth checking out, I personally love it.  

Strings of Harmony

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4768904-strings-of-harmony

This story… Has a very talented author. It is very well written, the spelling and grammar is about perfect. Which is impressive and I appreciate the effort. This is placed in the Teen Fiction Humor genre and I applaud the author, for it is the perfect and star story for this genre.

However, personally it bored me. It is a good story; it’s just my personal opinion that there is no plot to this. No good plot, at least… again, in my opinion. The only thing I enjoyed was the humor, or rather entertainment. It’s good for a small giggle, but nothing really more than that.

If you like stories about bands and music competitions, than this story is for you, but it’s not for me. The pacing needs to pick up, I honestly find chapters were too long and pointless at times. The beginning was good, but after reading on and on I  got bored.

I can say I recommend this story for the author’s amazing ability, I enjoyed reading it for that matter as well, it’s just something I personally will not continue to read. This type of story, even as well written and funny as it is, will only appeal to the right. I wish this author luck and hope she goes far. 

Secrets Unfold

http://www.wattpad.com/story/2484967-secrets-unfold

I kind of wish this wasn’t a vampire story, but I know it will become popular because of that. It’s just my personal opinion. I can say that this story is deep and intense. Even though the plot is still in the early stages and unfolding. The mystery is wonderfully amazing. Keeps me hooked.

I feel it has much potential. I admire the author’s talent, it’s well written besides the minor spelling and grammatical errors. This story needs more fans, I really find it brilliant, but the author needs to pick up her updating. That’s how you lose readers in my experience. So needs to be update more, grammar, spelling worked on and pick up pacing just slightly.

Overall I found this a story has much talent. The author is great at description and portraying her character’s emotion. I was very much impressed by the first chapter, but slowly felt disappointed with the rest of the story, so I hope the author gets back to what she was doing in the first chapter. The story and emotion just felt so more real and raw in that chapter. The author has amazing talent so why I will be holding her in high expectations. Give this story a read; it’s one to get into while you don’t have to catch up much. 

Ten Years Later

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1088719-ten-years-later

I love this story. I enjoyed it and think it’s very cute. Any girl should be able to relate this even a little. If you want a love triangle romance… this is the story for you. the author does a very good job and delivering this story. Very good descriptions along with letting her readers feel the emotions her characters feel. I applaud the author’s natural talent.

The negatives, the spelling and grammar needs work. Edit before you update because you will be too busy writing the next chapter to go back and edit the last. Trust me I learned that from experience.  

This story reminds me way too much of the movie, Sweet Home Alabama. I won’t ever accuse of it being a rip-off because sometimes it’s coincidence. The author can make this into her own story. Other than that it’s a great story and to the author, get a little more confidence…

No need to be asking your readers if it’s good or bad all the time. They will review their honest opinion and when they do fix your errors, don’t delete a story because everything you write can have potential. This author has a talent to write romances, so I will be looking forward to more from her.

Fifteen Letters

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4726322-fifteen-letters

Phenomenal. Not what I suspected. I thought this would be a sappy romance about 'fifteen love letters". Nope. I love how this is said to be a true story. So well done, so amazing every word fits so perfectly. I applaud the author for putting this out in the world. The emotion is raw. It squeezes your heart tight and releases it, every heart string feels a little pull. Sad, intense and touching is how I can describe it.

I hate to judge, but it seems to be something petty to kill yourself over someone rejecting you because they think you're gay. What I’m presuming, the plot has yet to unfold and I hope there’s a lot more to this true story. I won’t judge, pain is pain and I admire the writer for putting this out there.

No negative, the author is very talented, but I wish it wouldn’t be so repetitive. Yes, a little bit. Repeating fifteen letters over again and reliving that painful memory is a great fill and really brings the story together, but let’s step-up the pacing. I really enjoy this story and I want to see it become a renowned true story.

That in of itself makes it even more breath taking. Leaves you in a cold sweat that I love to feel when reading a story. I personally don’t like the ABC Family cast choices, but it’s cute and works I suppose. Overall this is a great story I will recommend for it has potential if it goes the way I hope it does. I know it’s hard since the author will want to stick with what really happened, but how the author delivers these events is what I hope will impress me and other readers. 

Regrets

http://www.wattpad.com/story/5170780-regrets

This story is delivered well in a way… I love the author’s style and natural talent, but the spelling, grammar and organization needs a lot of work. The chapters need some major editing. It’s not professional, but at least the author has talent. The summary hooked me in, even though it also was not well written.

I can say I like this story. It has peeked my interest and I think it has a good plot to it, even if it’s too early to tell. I feel potential. That’s the good thing at least, seeing the author grow. I want to see the author get better. She already has talent, now I want to see effort and discipline.

All in all this is a hard review to do because the little I can say is: The author has talent for a plot, but grammar is awful. If you’re looking for a spooky summer adventure, I believe this is the story for you.

I ask for author’s to at least give me three chapters to read, not only does this story only have two chapters, but they are extremely short chapters. The author has huge potential, please keep working hard I want to see you become a great writer. 

Love Online

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1738488-love-online

Without a doubt this story keeps you guessing. That’s why it’s great. Everything is up to par. A few spelling and grammatical errors, but nothing of huge notice. It was actually impressive. Delivered well and I’m a sucker for internet relationship romances, so I’m definitely hooked. For as many times as this type of romance has been done, this story seems quite original.

The negative is the consistency of chapters. I don’t care if you do two pages or if you do five, just keep each chapter the same length if you can. Doesn’t have to be exact, but don’t make one chapter extremely short and the next extremely long, it will begin to annoy readers.

The author switches from different perspectives quite good, also being in third person I find it impressive how the author keeps it clean and clear. I love the quotes the author decides to put at the beginning of the story. It’s a nice creative touch that puts readers in the mood to read that chapter.

Overall I like this story, I look forward to how the plot will unfold. I’d like to see pacing pick up— or make chapters longer. The story is already in the fourth chapter and the plot hasn’t really gone anywhere. Other than that, if you want an internet romance as much as I do… This is the story for you.