Ten Years Later

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1088719-ten-years-later

I love this story. I enjoyed it and think it’s very cute. Any girl should be able to relate this even a little. If you want a love triangle romance… this is the story for you. the author does a very good job and delivering this story. Very good descriptions along with letting her readers feel the emotions her characters feel. I applaud the author’s natural talent.

The negatives, the spelling and grammar needs work. Edit before you update because you will be too busy writing the next chapter to go back and edit the last. Trust me I learned that from experience.  

This story reminds me way too much of the movie, Sweet Home Alabama. I won’t ever accuse of it being a rip-off because sometimes it’s coincidence. The author can make this into her own story. Other than that it’s a great story and to the author, get a little more confidence…

No need to be asking your readers if it’s good or bad all the time. They will review their honest opinion and when they do fix your errors, don’t delete a story because everything you write can have potential. This author has a talent to write romances, so I will be looking forward to more from her.

Fifteen Letters

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4726322-fifteen-letters

Phenomenal. Not what I suspected. I thought this would be a sappy romance about 'fifteen love letters". Nope. I love how this is said to be a true story. So well done, so amazing every word fits so perfectly. I applaud the author for putting this out in the world. The emotion is raw. It squeezes your heart tight and releases it, every heart string feels a little pull. Sad, intense and touching is how I can describe it.

I hate to judge, but it seems to be something petty to kill yourself over someone rejecting you because they think you're gay. What I’m presuming, the plot has yet to unfold and I hope there’s a lot more to this true story. I won’t judge, pain is pain and I admire the writer for putting this out there.

No negative, the author is very talented, but I wish it wouldn’t be so repetitive. Yes, a little bit. Repeating fifteen letters over again and reliving that painful memory is a great fill and really brings the story together, but let’s step-up the pacing. I really enjoy this story and I want to see it become a renowned true story.

That in of itself makes it even more breath taking. Leaves you in a cold sweat that I love to feel when reading a story. I personally don’t like the ABC Family cast choices, but it’s cute and works I suppose. Overall this is a great story I will recommend for it has potential if it goes the way I hope it does. I know it’s hard since the author will want to stick with what really happened, but how the author delivers these events is what I hope will impress me and other readers. 

Regrets

http://www.wattpad.com/story/5170780-regrets

This story is delivered well in a way… I love the author’s style and natural talent, but the spelling, grammar and organization needs a lot of work. The chapters need some major editing. It’s not professional, but at least the author has talent. The summary hooked me in, even though it also was not well written.

I can say I like this story. It has peeked my interest and I think it has a good plot to it, even if it’s too early to tell. I feel potential. That’s the good thing at least, seeing the author grow. I want to see the author get better. She already has talent, now I want to see effort and discipline.

All in all this is a hard review to do because the little I can say is: The author has talent for a plot, but grammar is awful. If you’re looking for a spooky summer adventure, I believe this is the story for you.

I ask for author’s to at least give me three chapters to read, not only does this story only have two chapters, but they are extremely short chapters. The author has huge potential, please keep working hard I want to see you become a great writer. 

Love Online

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1738488-love-online

Without a doubt this story keeps you guessing. That’s why it’s great. Everything is up to par. A few spelling and grammatical errors, but nothing of huge notice. It was actually impressive. Delivered well and I’m a sucker for internet relationship romances, so I’m definitely hooked. For as many times as this type of romance has been done, this story seems quite original.

The negative is the consistency of chapters. I don’t care if you do two pages or if you do five, just keep each chapter the same length if you can. Doesn’t have to be exact, but don’t make one chapter extremely short and the next extremely long, it will begin to annoy readers.

The author switches from different perspectives quite good, also being in third person I find it impressive how the author keeps it clean and clear. I love the quotes the author decides to put at the beginning of the story. It’s a nice creative touch that puts readers in the mood to read that chapter.

Overall I like this story, I look forward to how the plot will unfold. I’d like to see pacing pick up— or make chapters longer. The story is already in the fourth chapter and the plot hasn’t really gone anywhere. Other than that, if you want an internet romance as much as I do… This is the story for you. 

Fiction

http://star-blazer.deviantart.com/gallery/37994867

Beautifully written. The style the author has is so poetic. I love that; every word in every sentence is perfectly delivered. The emotion, the passion. The plot all seems so addicting and wonderful to see how the life of Daniel, an aspiring writer will work out.

The other thing I love about the author’s style is he truly transfers my mind back to the Victorian England era. I can imagine every detail and I appreciate that, how the author has the talent to bring this story to life. It all seems so real.

What I’d like to see is more effort with updates and organizing it all better. I know the author is still early on in the story, but before you upload chapters be sure to get them organized and keep them the way you want them to be. That’s the only main negative I find.

Other than that, this is an enchanting story I will be looking forward to reading more of. And to find out if the author has more talent in writing other than the style, but in plot. We will see, in any case I recommend this story to anyone looking for an enchanting fantasy that brings you away from reality for at least a little while.

Starstruck On Tuesday

http://llo7.deviantart.com/art/Starstruck-On-Tuesday-366805740?q=gallery%3Allo7%2F27199373&qo=0

The title isn’t the only thing catchy about this short story. Without a doubt this author is amazingly talented. A great gift for writing that it’s truly admirable. This short story may have not had a real plot to it, but the writing style alone kept me hooked. It is delivered so well that I couldn’t find a thing really wrong with it. For a first written work, it’s amazing.

I’d personally like to see this author do something more. A real novel or a short story filled with a thicker plot. I hate seeing so much talent going to waste. The spelling, grammar, pacing and the way it was delivered all seem to check out to be done so professionally.

At first I didn’t feel like reading a short story, I want to see an author putting all their effort into one piece of work. At least if it’s a short story, I want to see it filled with a good, thick plot. I didn’t find that in this story, but I found a talented author. That I hope I would see published one day… if that is his desire. I hope so. Sad seeing talent wasted. 

Caravan

http://www.caravantale.com/comics/1664951/prologue-cover/

This is a great fantasy web-comic. I recommend to all. I love the plot and the author’s style. The characters stay in character very well. This comic is most impressive for its plot and the updates the author does. That’s appreciated, and again, impressive dedication. Updates five days a week! Although, taking notice of comics that update less…

Their art is better. Why? Probably because they take their days of not updating to practice drawing. This comic will go far. I can honestly say that, but if the author don’t buckle down and get better at their illustration I don’t believe she will find a publisher. Story is to perfection.

Art needs work along with organizing speech balloons. It sometimes was confusing. Even though this has a lot of originality to it, which I love… It reminds me of the TV series, Avatar: The last Airbender. Without a doubt you can say the author was inspired by that series. I can add though at least it wasn’t a huge influence where it shows through glaringly obviously.  

We’re still early on in this web-comic series, and I hope to see more of Caravan. If it is dropped I will be disappointed. I doubt it will be. I see a lot of effort and I will expect nothing less than that. I applaud this comic. Looking forward to the unfolding plot and the author’s growth as a writer and artist.