My Second Sight

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4406981-my-second-sight

Nice summary to start off, the prologue is even more amazing. I was a little disappointed when I found out this may be a, “vampire story” but I read on because it is very well written so far, especially as far as organization and plot go.

Turns out to be a vampire story… Not a vampire love story, thank God, but nonetheless a vampire story. It may have been better if you replace the vampires with the CIA or something. That’s just my personal opinion of preferred genre nonetheless though. Some readers like vampire stories, some don’t.

This story really keeps you reading whether you like it or not. That’s the way a story needs to be. The tension in this story keeps building up, keeps you wondering so much about what happened and what will happen. I love that mysterious feeling when I am reading.

In any case I can say I love this story, only minor grammar mistakes and the rest seems perfect, plot, pacing, detail. So if you’re looking for a great action-fantasy-mystery about a psychic girl who has vampires after her with a little romance thrown into the mix… This is the story for you. 

Reality bites

http://www.wattpad.com/story/1660107-reality-bites

First off, I think some author’s forget about the importance of a summary. This author is one of those, I recommend making the summary of this story longer and more interesting. Good at keeping the plot secret, but also I have no clue what this story is; it doesn’t give enough of the story away to me to hook me in to read the book. Work on that.

What I assume to be the “prologue”, the opening to Reality Bites is amazingly done. I loved that, that’s more like a better summary, so I’d personally replace the summary with that. That is something that will hook a reader into this book. I also want to see a little more descriptiveness… Sometimes the author is good at it, sometimes not…

Now that that’s out of the way, this story is wonderful. If you’re looking for a thrilling fantasy than this is for you. If you believe in demons and other realms other than the one you know, this is for you. The author has sheer talent for writing and I am impressed. Minor work in this story, other than that, this is my type of read and I recommend it to all.

This is the type of story I hope to see go far, the writing style is nearly perfect. It is as an author and reader alike do… Escape reality. The author really takes you away from reality and opens your mind to that in itself. At this point I’m no longer one that wants an escape but… In any case this story is direct on telling you you’re escaping and that there are many other worlds to discover, I like that and I hope this plot will have some good twists coming soon…

That Morning

http://www.wattpad.com/15803650-that-morning#.UZQQP46sFFZ

Interesting. I can say nothing more; this is a teen fiction short story… That is still early on within the book. I like it so far. I’d like the author to put a summary on this and slow down, this sometimes get’s confusing when you jump right from one scene to the next. Put some obvious indentations within your paragraphs.

The author needs to work on her grammar, perspectives and pacing. Other than that this story is off to a nice start. Too early in the book to say, honestly. It’s an interesting start nonetheless and I hope the author will impress with the plot. As far as I’m concerned this story can go in an upright swing or go downhill.

We will see in do time. For now, I’m rating it so far, so good. Plot is interesting; I see it going far if the author puts in some effort. Other than that I will just suggest other’s to give it a read. It’s better than a lot of other things I’ve read; at least the author has talent and some skill. So let’s get this unknown author known. 

The House of Lattimore

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4944357-the-house-of-lattimore

This story is an amazingly professional job. The author has amazing talent for descriptions, which is highly needed in the Historical Fiction genre. You need to transfer your readers mind back to whatever era you are trying to portray and the author of this story does it splendidly. I found practically no mistakes in this story as far as spelling and grammar are concerned.

One thing I think that could use some improvement is that the length of chapters is unconsistent. Try to keep chapters at a decent length and all the same length. It’s disappointing to read one long chapter and then one extremely short one. Readers may lose interest. Shorten some paragraphs as well, other than that I’m impressed with the professionalism.

I recommend this story to all, or those of you looking for a Historical Fiction Romance. It is quite good; plot keeps me interested and that is a hard thing to do. This type of story you need self-study, you need description, you need more effort than other genres that can just be pulled out of your hat.

The author did this story without fail. I sometimes feel it is a tad predictable, but nonetheless makes me question myself, makes me read more and more so I recommend this story for it has just impressed me so much.

Neo Genesis

http://kool10001.deviantart.com/journal/

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Saosin_Rising/1169195/

This story isn’t officially posted online yet, the author still has it in draft form, but I mist say it is an impressive three chapter draft. The author emailed it to me asking for a review and I cannot deny giving this story a review before it hits the net. I want to see this story get popular.

It’s very thrilling and I love a good science fiction novel. The chapters are a great length, organized, and well plotted. This author has an amazing talent and I hope to see him just keep writing. I find nothing really bad about this story, it still needs slight edits but the author will find those mistakes, it’s still in draft form.

Before I forget I will mention to you all that the author desires to make this series of his into a graphic novel. So if there are any comic artists reading this interested in becoming the artist of this story, please contact me or the author. The author will not pay you but in my opinion I would get in on this story. For I feel it will go far one day— or at least I hope so. This would be a great action movie, it starts out beautifully.

I can only say positives about this story and highly recommend, it’s one of my favorites I’ve read in awhile. The thrilling, occult, sci-fi and action stories are just so addicting for me, and even if you’re not into that stuff… Maybe this story will make you be… Check it out for yourself.  

All The Little Sacrifices

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4741387-all-the-little-sacrifices

This story isn’t what you’ll suspect. At first you think it’s just about an aspiring actress trying to get discovered, just something funny and amusing, but… I tell you it’s so much more. It is thrilling and leaves me on edge to read more. I recommend it to anyone honestly. It’s a good balance of everything.

I’d like the pacing to be slightly faster, but other than that this story is very well written. I hardly found any grammar or spelling mistakes. Only the pacing and the description could be a bit better. Other than that it’s perfect.

Never thought humor and horror could be blended this well. I honestly love this story and hope it get’s more attention. That’s why I am pointing it out here, the last few stories I have read have been crap and it really helps you appreciate an author with so much talent writing a story like this. Check it out. 

Blaze

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4569202-blaze

This story is wicked. I love the ingenious plot, it may seem like a X-men or Sky High rip-off to most people, but I appreciate the originality I do see. I recommend this to all. I personally love this story.

The only thing I didn’t like about the story was the main character’s name… Asterisk… Isn’t that what this  *  is? At least the author pointed that out in the story. Oh well, don’t let that shallow critique stop you from reading this. I definitely want to read on with this story and recommend it to all who are into the super-girl kind of stories.

So now in all seriousness, the only mistake I find is minor grammar and spelling, slight lack of description and mainly, that I believe the author should have done this story in first person. Sometimes it switches from third person to first person and that gets confusing. I don’t care what perspective the author decides to do, just pick one and stick with it.

Overall this story impressed me. It is delivered very well and I appreciate the hard effort, admire the author’s talent and look forward to more. If you are looking for a story about mutant kids with special abilities, this story is for you.