The Mark Of The Beast

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4054642-the-mark-of-the-beast

Blood-chilling. This is a wicked story and I love it. I usually am not one for Were stories, but this intrigued me. Done very well, it leaves me on edge. Thrilling. Keeps me hooked and reading. I love the plot, seems very original.

Overall it is well written. A few spelling and grammatical mishaps, but nothing of major concern. The three-year old, Rose seems to articulate herself too well for a three-year old. I feel she is out of character. Before her age was revealed I presumed her to be a six-year old. Twice her age so I suggest the author work on delivering characters. And organization.

I can say I like this story in the least. It is interesting, something fresh and I feel it will go far as the plot unfolds. Something new and weird is my cup of tea. Of course that is my opinion, I just so happen to write a paranormal romance as well. So I hope my reviews don’t become biased. Trying to review this with an open-mind, I believe this story needs work overall, but the plot alone makes up for everything. That is all I have to say. 

Guardian Revolution

http://www.wattpad.com/story/5110890-guardian-revolution

Captivating. That is the first word I think of when reading this story. Anyone into Sci-Fi is sure to love this read. I know I do. It’s something new, something with originality, which I honestly love to see the most. For to have originality in this day and age is hard to do, usually something to compare to or something you find that inspired the story. Here to my knowledge, I do not find that.

The flaw I find is that there’s a bit too much foreshadowing. A spoiler in the story itself; making me feel like I know what’s going to happen. Even with that being I feel this could be the next bestseller, a renowned blockbuster. It truly peeks my interest.

The author’s writing style I admire though. She chooses the perfect choice of words, how she delivers it. The pacing is good, as well. This story is unique, especially the prologue. It could be something that stands by itself, you can feel the emotion of the main character asking questions into her own mind. I like that. It’s unique. The prologue was good, explained enough without giving the plot away, but the author has that downfall in later chapters.

Other than that this story is bloody brilliant. I want to see this as a bestseller one day in the Fantasy/Science Fiction section. Let’s at least get a Watty Award for this author. I honestly will recommend this story to anyone.

Against the Odds

http://www.wattpad.com/15239653-against-the-odds-prologue-a-tale-of-two-worlds#.UW69DY6sGiw

This story is splendid. This story is historical fiction set in what I believe to be 18^th century London— year undetermined quite yet. In any case, this story follows the life of two young women. A noble woman and a homeless woman on the streets of London.

I have no clue where the author is really, honestly taking this plot— and I usually hate that, when I feel there is no plot, but the author’s writing keeps me reading for I feel the potential and talent spilling from the pages with passion and admirable dedication.

There is hardly anything I have to critique on this story… Perhaps, paragraphs could be broken up more, but other than that I love this story. The style of the writer I truly admire. The dark, forbid feeling I get reading word for word keeps hooking me and it fits so well. So much I wish to find out. I hope the story stays at this good pacing and unfolds to have these girl’s lives collide. Very interesting, I want to see some action, plot twists.

The mystery and even small things— like the author giving her characters the proper accent in their words— makes this story all the more real feeling. And I appreciate that. The effort put into the story at every detail. It is still early on in the story, yet I am so impressed. This is a story I will recommend to anyone. 

Stay

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4524644-stay

A cute romance. Emotions are portrayed nicely, and switching perspectives is done well. I applaud the writers ability how she delivers a High School romance so well. I’m hard to please when it comes to these teenage romances. They’re hard to write without getting too cheesy. Keeping them realistic and this I feel is pretty good as far as realism is concerned. I can relate with it actually.

Grammar and spelling needs work. Paragraphs need to be broken up. Also, I’d appreciate longer chapters, they’re way too short, but I won’t complain because it’s a good story… for a High School romance that is. I like the story, but could be better if the author was more descriptive with the surroundings and characters.

The author gets better at being descriptive as the story goes on, but still readers are clueless about what the characters really look like. I like this romance though; it’s cute and keeps me hooked. Who will the protagonist choose? He popularity or the guy that will make her lose her popularity and fake friends? Seems like an easy choice, but not to the protagonist.

So I recommend it. If you want a good teenage romance, about popular girl choosing between geek or chic. Than this is the story for you. It has much potential and if the author works on her writing ability I honestly believe this could become a popular teenage romance. 

His Sunglasses

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4486156-his-sunglasses

A good story, but depends on who is reading. Personally this isn’t the kind of romance I enjoy, it feels slowly paced and I just want to get to the plot already. This story needs cliffhangers and plot twists. It has potential, but hasn’t impressed me yet. Besides the author’s wonderful style, the story itself doesn’t interest me.

There seems to be little to no plot to this at all. That, I believe, is more my personal opinion since this High School romance rather bores me. For a fact, the author needs to be more descriptive sooner about her characters. I barely can connect an image to the characters in the first few chapters.

I find it cute how we look at both perspectives of Ashton and Amelia, but it is also boring reading over the same thing twice, just from a different perspective. Another thing is, yes, there is a plot. One that seems so predictable that Ashton falls in love with Amelia because she’s the only girl that plays hard to get and she will be the one that blows his cover of him working at a coffee shop. I’ll find out though.

Nonetheless it’s a cute romance, I was still able to read so I admit it’s good. The writer has talent. That I can’t deny. The way the author delivers it and on some fronts the descriptiveness has great style. Can admire that without a doubt. I like the author’s style of writing. If you’re looking for a High School romance I recommend this story.

A Battle of Heirs

http://www.wattpad.com/story/5076368-a-battle-of-heirs

First off, I must say how I extremely love historical fiction. This story however… I cannot say if I love it or if I hate it. I’m saying it is too soon to tell. I believe the author has potential, without a doubt. I’m letting the author know I will not go easy on him/her— or any author for that matter, when it comes to historical fiction.

You have to do your research. As much as I like the originality of this plot. I also appreciate when authors do their research about REAL historical events. It shows effort and dedication and that’s what I like to see.

There’s spelling and grammatical errors that need fixing. It is also very dry, needs a lot more detail and passion. I feel little to no passion, sadly. Also I feel it would be better if written in first person. This story— or this writer— needs to find their style and I don’t believe writing in third person is good for this story. As of now you read it like a history textbook and I don’t know if that’s a good thing or a bad thing. I believe majority of readers will see it as bad.

I have nothing more to say. All I can hope is that this story will get better. As said, it is too soon to tell. This story has caught my interest and I look forward to the potential that I see in this story and the author. Interesting plot, I recommend it to those interested in Camelot and King Arthur.

The Heartless Winter

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4115044-the-heartless-winter

This will put a knot in your stomach. This will put you on the edge of your seat with the romantic tragedy that is all mystery. This is an unbelievably sad romance that leaves you breathless… And impressed. The emotion the author puts into the narrator is exquisite. Emotional plot overall and I love how descriptive the author was with it all.

I would have never have guessed where the author would take the plot. It kept me hooked for it’s far from predictable. Simply amazing. It is a romance like Romeo & Juliet. A true classic, but the author knows how to add her own originality to it. That alone I admire and applaud. I also like the paranormal sides of the story.

Only thing wrong with this is a few small spelling errors and paragraphs that needed not to be separated. The final page was a bit confusing when it started to repeat what was on the first page, but I personally think it was a creative touch. Other than that the only sad thing is that it’s a short story. You crave more from this author. To pack so much plot and emotion into a short story is impressive.

When you start to read this, it’s not like other stories where you figure out what will happen after a few paragraphs. The hints in this story are so indirect it leaves you wondering what happened to his lover. He tells us he killed her when really he… Go read it for yourself. It will leave you guessing until the last sentence.